Santa Clause

EXERCISE 1:

Original:
1. The investigators have gathered and analyzed all the evidence. We may expect a full report.
2. Tom had listened to the music of Bruce Springsteen for years. He had no idea a live performance could be so exciting.
3. The team has suffered its share of injuries this year. It could have improved its performance by giving Flynn more time on the field.

Fixed/Different:
1. After the investigators have gathered and analyzed all the evidence, we may expect a full report.
2. Although Tom had listened to the music Bruce Springsteen for years, he had no idea his live performances could be so exciting.
3. Even though the team suffered its share of injuries this year. It could have improved its performance by giving Flynn more time on the field.

EXERCISE 2:

OOOO = Subordinate Clause

5. If he charged, I could shoot; if he took no notice of me, it would be safe to leave him until the mahout came back.


10. There will never be a really free and enlightened State, until the State comes to recognize the individual as a higher and independent power, from which all its own power and authority are derived, and treats him accordingly.

EXERCISE 3:

4. A minority is powerless while it conforms to the majority; it is not even a minority then; but it is irresistible when it clogs by its whole weight. If the alternative is to keep all just men in prison, or give up war and slavery, the State will not hesitate which to choose. If a thousand men were not to pay their tax-bills this year, that would not be a violent and bloody measure, as it would be to pay them, and enable the State to commit violence and shed innocent blood. This is, in fact, the definition of a peaceable revolution, if any such is possible. If the tax-gatherer, or any other public officer, asks me, as one has done, "But what shall I do?" my answer is, "If you really wish to do anything, resign your office." When the subject has refused allegiance and the officer has resigned his office, then the revolution is accomplished.

"Analyze the use of subordinate clauses. Pay particular attention to how the writer varies sentence patterns."

     The paragraph is giving the conditions on what is needed to happen for Thoreau's vision of revolution to occur. There must not be conformity of the minorities as they are no better than the majority.